Compare/contrast, Psychology/psychiatry…need Help With My Mediocre Writing. (it’s Long)?
Posted by IT CommentatorSep 24
This is what I got so far. I really need help editing this to something that sounds, reads better. I know as it sits it is not worth much of a grade. Please any constructive criticism you can offer would be greatly appreciated.
While Psychologists and Psychiatrists both share common roots, work in similar environments, and have comparable day to day duties, there are many profound differences between these two often confused professions.
The ancient Greeks and Romans considered psychological problems to be supernatural. Hindu scriptures known as Ramayana, and Mahabharata, describes illnesses of the mind arising from an imbalance of bodily fluids. The Chinese attached the afflicted with an imbalance of Ying and Yang. Each and every culture with the ability to display beliefs in a form of writing, reported a perception of mental illness. It was only a matter of time before the study of the mind became scientific. Psychologists today believe that mental illness is caused by life stresses and maladaptive behavior patterns. Whereas psychiatrists understand the disturbed mind to be of biological in origin. Both seek to understand and treat the unfortunate victims of the mental disorders that has taken hold of so many lives.
To better understand the perception and treatment of each field of study, one must understand the education, philosophy and the foundation of both professions. A psychologist, usually requires either a Ph.D or Psy.D to practice independently. A psychiatrist on the other hand, must acquire a medical degree before pursuing an education in mental health. This is coupled with at least four years of residency; a minimum of three of those four years must be in the mental health field. Possession of a medical degree allows a psychiatrist to administer a variety of medical tests, prescribe medication, and supervise electrotherapy treatments whereas a psychologist cannot. Both do however follow the same law of ethics, and provide similar duties such as educating students in the understanding the mind, conducting research, and, providing psychotherapy sessions. Some of the common places to see a psychologist or psychiatrist are hospitals, clinics, nursing homes, schools, prisons, rehabilitation centers, military settings, and also private practices. Both often work in a collaborative environment as team players to enhance diagnostic abilities, and improve treatment strategy.
The two professions also work individually. A psychologist mainly treats patients who are struggling with life issues. They may help someone adjust to life after being incarcerated, aid a family in the loss of a loved one, help children process the divorce of their parents, a veteran cope with the amputation of his limbs, or perhaps offer guidance to a confused adolescent. A psychiatrist can also do all of the same things, and can offer additional help due to the fact he/she is a physician. For example, patients suffering from schizophrenia may choose the aid of a psychiatrist rather than just a psychologist. This would be beneficial in order to receive medication and therapy from a single source to suppress the voices and delusions in their mind. Though the approach for treatment can be very different, the objective is always the same, both are in a position of service to aid in the quality of life to any given individual.
It is easy to see why these two valued occupations are commonly intertwined as being the same, but there are a number of other differences between the two. For instance, Psychologist and psychiatrists earn substantially different amounts of money. Psychiatrists procure an astounding average of $180,000.00 annually, while a psychologist doesn’t earn half that amount at a mere $59,440.00 per year. Another notable difference is that fifty percent of psychiatrists chose to maintain private practices, whilst a psychologist is more likely to work within an organization.
Many years of sweat and tears have of gone into the experimentation and research needed to further the understanding of the human mind. These two accomplices of service, work together, and individually, to aid our society through times of catastrophe and hardship. They are educated extensively, share common goals of assistance, and make significant changes in the lives of the unfortunate individuals who need the aid of these two professions so desperately. In order to care for a patient fully, both of these Samaritans are needed for their individual perceptions and treatments.
47 minutes ago – 4 days left to answer.
That was good. A few too many commas, but I, have, that, habit, too.
he/she: should be he or she.
“just a psychologist”: that’s a little demeaning, isn’t it? And are schizonphrenics more likely to be “referred” to someone, rather than choosing one?
“team players”: “members of a team” would be better. “Team players” implies something a little different to me — someone who doesn’t criticize, someone who follows the team goals and ideas even if they differ from her own.
This sentence isn’t clear: “The two professions also work individually”. Because it isn’t really the profession working, it’s an individual who pratices that profession. But I don’t have a better suggestion.
“intertwined as being the same”? That’s confusing. Did you mean to say that people often mix them up? Or that they often work together?
“Psychiatrists procure an astounding” – procure isn’t good here. There’s no harm in using “earn” in both parts of that sentence.
“fifty percent of psychiatrists chose” should be choose.
“whilst” — in America, at least, that should be “while”.
“These two accomplices of service, work together”. Accomplices isn’t a good work here, and there’s one of those extra commas.
But that was really good.
Very good essay.
I especially like your phrase “accomplices of service”.
I made a few changes, not too many.
I hope this helps.
While Psychologists and Psychiatrists share common roots and environments, and have comparable day to day duties, there are many profound differences between these two often confused professions.
The ancient Greeks and Romans considered psychological problems to be supernatural. Hindu scriptures known as Ramayana and Mahabharata describe illnesses of the mind as arising from an imbalance of bodily fluids. The Chinese diagnosed the mentally afflicted with an imbalance of Ying and Yang. Each and every culture with the ability to display beliefs in a form of writing has reported their own perception of mental illness. It was only a matter of time before the study of the mind became scientific. Psychologists today believe that mental illness is caused by life stresses and maladaptive behavior patterns, whereas psychiatrists have concluded that the cause of a disturbed mind is biological in origin. They both seek to understand and treat the many unfortunate victims of mental disorders.
To better understand the perception and treatment of each field of study, one must understand the education, philosophy and foundation of both professions. A psychologist usually requires either a PhD or Spy’s to practice independently. A psychiatrist on the other hand, must acquire a medical degree before pursuing an education in mental health. This is coupled with at least four years of residency; a minimum of three of those four years having to be in the mental health field. Possession of a medical degree allows a psychiatrist to administer a variety of medical tests, prescribe medication, and supervise electrotherapy treatments, whereas a psychologist cannot. Both professions do, however, follow the same law of ethics. They also provide similar services, such as educating students in understanding the mind, conducting research and providing psychotherapy sessions. Some common places to see both psychologists and psychiatrists are hospitals, clinics, nursing homes, schools, prisons, rehabilitation centers, military settings, and also private practices. They often work in a collaborative environment as team players to enhance diagnostic abilities and improve treatment strategies.
The two professions also work individually. A psychologist mainly treats patients who are struggling with life issues. They may help someone adjust to life after being incarcerated, aid a family in the loss of a loved one, help children process the divorce of their parents, a veteran cope with the amputation of his limbs, or perhaps offer guidance to a confused adolescent. A psychiatrist can do all of these things, and can offer additional help due to the fact he/she is a physician. For example, patients suffering from schizophrenia may choose the aid of a psychiatrist rather than a psychologist. This would be beneficial in order to receive medication and therapy from a single source to suppress the voices and delusions in their mind. The objective for both professions is to aid in the quality of life of any given individual, although their approaches to treatment may differ.
It is easy to see why these two valued occupations are commonly misconstrued as being the same, but there are a number of other differences between the two. For instance, psychologists and psychiatrists earn substantially different amounts of money. Psychiatrists procure an astounding average salary of $180,000.00 annually, while a psychologist doesn’t earn half as much, on average a mere $60,000.00 per year, comparatively. Another notable difference is that fifty percent of psychiatrists choose to maintain private practices, while psychologists are more likely to work within an organization.
Many years of sweat and tears have gone into the experimentation and research needed to further the understanding of the human mind. These two accomplices of service have worked together and individually, to aid members of our society through times of catastrophe and hardship, and will continue to do so. They are educated extensively and share a common goal of helping those in need. They make significant changes in the lives of the unfortunate, who need the aid of these two professions so desperately. In order to care for all patients fully, both types of these Samaritans are needed for their individual perceptions and treatments